One hot boiling day I walked down the slope and into the lovely pool gate. The first thing I did when I got there was sit down with my class. first up is number one said miss mitchell in a loud voice so everyone with a number one on their hand had to go line up by miss mackinnon the first five got in there long stretchy lane and it was crystal clear freezing cold and blue. BANG!!the clapper went I swam and swam until finally it was finished .I came first. When I was in the water I herd people clapping like a herd of elephants stomping away. I was in was number 4 aswell when I was in it felt like I was at the rocky shore.
by madeline
Wow Madeline - this is a great story. I love the descriptive language that you use. I think I was part of the herd of elephants trumpeting their trunks and stomping their feet for you and your friends! Love Mum xo
ReplyDeleteAwesome Mad. Wonderful writing. Love Grandma
ReplyDeleteWonderful writing Mad. So proud. are you diving like Papa taught you!
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What an exciting story Mads! I felt like i was right there in the pool with you. But i don't think i could have made it to the end of that long stretchy lane as fast as you did! Love Dad
ReplyDeleteThanks Mum that was a really nice coment .
ReplyDeleteby madeline.
thank you grandma for both your comments they were really nice.
ReplyDeletelov madeline.
Thank you grandma for both your comments they were really nice
Deletelove madeline.
thanks dad that was really nice of you to say.
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you to say
I loved it . It was cool as
ReplyDeleteFrom Kyla
Great story Mads! It is so cool that I can read about you even when I am all the way in Florida! Cant wait to see you
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