Wednesday, 10 April 2013

THE END


Dear Mr Pumpkin,

When you were a tiny little seed you looked like a little fish eye. You had lots of life to live. You made us win in a pumpkin carnival. It was great having you. You rolled like a run away egg. You cracked like a window. Im so so so sorry we hurt you.


Love Marina

12 comments:

  1. Hello Marina, I like the imagery you used in this piece. What happened to the pumpkin after it broke? Did you save the seeds?
    From the parents at the Digital Learning Evening

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    1. thank you no we didn't keep the seeds I am sad because we hurt it I wish we still had it.

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  2. I like the way you described in your story.
    From Geon

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    1. Thanks Geon what was your best bit Im going to look at your one

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  3. that was great marina.from Liana.

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    1. thank you that was nice Im going to look at your one

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  4. I think you need to work a bit harder on your story.



    From Georgia

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  5. Ho kay by the way I will look at yours.from Liana.

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    1. I didn't mean yours sorry I said to Georgia okay.

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  6. I think you need to work a bit harder on your editing.


    From Georgia

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