Wednesday, 13 March 2013

hooray I am going swimming

when  I  hopped   in   I   felt   delighted . I  was  extremely  tired.  Did  you  fell  nervous because    I m nervous.  It  felt  nevverauking   .    I  think  it  felt   freezing like  a  freezer  that  was  frozen  like a  ice cube .  when I hopped   into   the  pool   it  went  splash  spolsh   boom  chrash goes the water . the water   was like a iacwbe  .   it pulled me  in and out . I could  fell  something at  THE BOTTOM  OF  THE  POOL IT   FELT  LIKE  A SHARK   THAT   WAS  SPINNING   ME ANOUND . I came  first  second  second .  the end.  By  Elise.
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  1. Unknown14 March 2013 at 18:38

    Hi Elise,
    I'm glad you did it even though you were a bit scared at first! I have found that making myself do things I am scared of feels great when I have achieved it. Kia kaha- be strong.

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  2. Anonymous15 March 2013 at 16:44

    Well thats a great descriptive narrative Elise, you are really exploring with new words. Keep trying your best. Mum xx

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  3. Anonymous15 March 2013 at 16:55

    I like the story from Jaya

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  4. Unknown18 March 2013 at 16:25

    wot an loge story

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  5. Unknown18 March 2013 at 18:06

    cool

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  6. Unknown18 March 2013 at 18:46

    Thank you mum from mum from elise

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  7. Unknown18 March 2013 at 20:57

    I like your story it was very cool

    From Ashleigh

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