Wednesday, 6 March 2013

Splish Splosh

One cold day we walked down to the pool the crowd was like a herd of elephants, stomping and clapping. When I got in it was like a spa but ...boom! crash! goes the water everybody is screaming I could not get out fast enough. It pulled me in and out. It felt like I was on the rocky shore. The waves were jumbo, someone pulled me out and then I was safe on the ground!

 The End
By Paris
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8 comments:

  1. Anonymous6 March 2013 at 23:55

    I can just imagine what it was like in the pool Paris. You have painted a picture of how you were feeling really well by writing about all the things that were happening to you. I like 'It pulled me out and in. I felt like I was on the rocky shore.'

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  2. Unknown7 March 2013 at 15:27

    Thank you for reading my amazing story!!! your comment is really nice.
    from Paris

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  3. Jim & Kaye Ardern10 March 2013 at 21:25

    Great story Paris well done xoxo Love Nana Kaye & Grandad Jim

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  4. Unknown12 March 2013 at 16:23

    I can amagan I am at the bech liying down having a picnic
    WELL DONE PARIS

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  5. Mum and Dad15 March 2013 at 01:29

    Very proud of you Paris very well done xx love mum and dad

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  6. Unknown17 March 2013 at 12:36

    I liked your story Paris it was cool.

    From Georgia

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  7. Unknown18 March 2013 at 17:55

    wow graet job .

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  8. Unknown18 March 2013 at 18:58

    Great recount Paris. From Geon

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